The Witch Hunter - Deleted Scene

This scene was cut in my very first round of revisions with my editor at Little, Brown Books for Young Readers, Pam Gruber. We replaced it in favor of a more serious scene (and one that absolutely fits the story better) but this scene still makes me laugh. It’s Elizabeth’s first attempt at escaping Nicholas Perevil’s house, shortly after she wakes up and finds herself held captive there. It’s also her first close encounter with John, and the first hint George gets that Elizabeth may not be what she seems.


            Finally, I’m alone. I rush to the window, fling the curtains aside and grab the handle, giving it a turn and a push. Nothing. I try again, using all my strength. It still won’t budge. I’m tempted to throw the chair through it, but that’ll bring George—and everyone else too—in a second. It’s probably magicked shut.
            I look around. Ceiling, floor, walls. There’s got to be a way out. The fireplace! That’s it. The fire is still burning low, so I grab George’s blanket off the chair and throw it over the flames, putting them out. While I wait for the smoke to clear I rush across the room to the wardrobe. Inside, just as George said, there’s an assortment of clean but ugly dresses.
            I grab the smallest one, a brown, drab-looking thing and put it on over my shift. It hangs on me like an empty grain sack, the bottom trailing several inches behind me. There’s nothing for it, unless . . . I grab another dress and rip the skirt off, tearing it into strips. I tie one around my waist like a belt, another in my hair to keep it off my face. But I still have no shoes. I have to do something about that. I can’t run away barefoot.
            There’s a knock on the door.
            “You all right in there?” George asks. I see the doorknob turning.
            “Don’t come in! I’m naked!” I yell. I find a horrid pair of boots, far too big, and bind them around my feet with another strip of skirt.
            The doorknob stops turning.
            “What’s taking so long?”
            “These dresses, none of them fit. I’m doing the best I can!” Done. I run back to the fireplace and stick my head in the chimney. Feel the walls. The fire’s been burning all night, so they’re still hot. Very. But I can manage a few burns. Thanks to the healer’s potions I’m strong enough that they should heal quickly. It’s still smoky inside but I can’t wait any longer.
            “I’m almost ready,” I call to George. Then I climb into the fireplace.
            The chimney is about four feet wide and fashioned from jagged stones that make good hand and footholds. Even with my too-big boots, I’m easily able to climb. But the smoke is a problem. It’s hard to breathe and I can’t see more than a foot above me. I have to rely on my other senses.
            I whistle a few times to try and get a sense of how high this chimney goes. It doesn’t echo too much, I’ve maybe got twenty meters to climb. But on my next step, my shoulder smashes into stone. The opening has gotten smaller, maybe two feet across now. That’s really narrow, even for me. But I’m determined to get out of here.
            I dig my toe into a hold, take a huge step and cram myself through. I’m in up to my waist, my hands pinned to my sides, when I hear noises below. A door slamming open, a voice calling my name. George. It won’t be long before he thinks to look for me here. I’ve got to get out of reach. My foot scrabbles for another hold—got it. But as soon as I put my weight on the stone, it breaks free, clattering down and landing with a thump on the ground.
            “She’s in here!” I hear George’s voice echoing up the chimney.
            Damnation! I wrench my hands free and reach up for a hold. But as soon as I find one, I feel a hand grab my ankle. I try and kick it free but it holds fast.
            “Let go of me!” I shriek, still kicking.
            “Elizabeth—ow! Would you stop—dammit . . . ow!” It’s the healer, John.
            He grasps my other ankle and pulls. He’s strong. But I’m stronger. However, the stone isn’t. My hold breaks free and I fall, down through the chimney, crashing on top of him. We go tumbling out of the fireplace, tangled together in a heap of soot and ash. I start to wriggle free but he grabs my wrists, rolls me over and pins me to the ground.
            “What the hell are you doing?” His face is inches from mine. “Have you lost your mind?”
            “Get off,” I mutter, trying to break free from his grasp. But he’s holding me tight. I could easily kick him off, but I probably shouldn’t do that. This escape attempt is going to make them suspicious enough. I don’t need to add getting caught to the list. I stop struggling, but John still holds me tight.
            “John, don’t let her up. Not until she tells where she was going.” George kneels down next to me, his eyes boring into mine. “Go on. Talk.”
            I glare at him and say nothing.
            “I’ll just get Nicholas then,” he says, rolling back on his heels to stand.
            “I was going home!” I blurt. “I have to go home. I can’t stay here. I have to leave!” It’s the truest thing I’ve said since I got here.
            “Why?” John demands. “Why do you want to leave?” Half of his dark hair is colored white with ash.
            The truth, it just keeps on coming. “Because! Because you’re a wizard —” John opens his mouth to object. “Fine. Healer. That’s just as bad. And you—” I turn to George. “You’re a spy. You’re both Reformers. Traitors. And now you want to take me to some seer, and I don’t want to get mixed up in that. I’m in enough trouble as it is. And Nicholas! Don’t get me started with him. He’s the most wanted criminal in Anglia, and—what?”
            George and John exchange a look. John gets to his feet and offers his hand down to me. I ignore it.
            “That’s not exactly true,” George says.
            “What?”
            “You said Nicholas was the most wanted criminal in the kingdom. Well, that’s not exactly the case any more.” They both stand there, looking at me so oddly. “Someone else has been awarded that dubious honor.”
            “So?” I snap. “It hardly matters, because—”
            “Oh, it matters,” George says. “Because the most wanted criminal in Anglia is now you.”